Around the world it is likely that more adults will work from home, and more children will study from home, as computer technology becomes cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this will be a positive or a negative development.

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Technology came to make our days easier and improve our quality of

life

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it seems difficult to change traditional mores

however

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it is necessary to look ahead and go to the

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step.

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essay will argue how good can be the benefits of a children

study

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from

home

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and adults work by

homeoffice

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home office

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First

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it is important to see the prons about it,

such

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as saving time doing the job or studying from

home

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Nevertheless

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, many employers

dont

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don't

know exactly how it can be

usefull

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useful

the manly thing behind

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thought is

use

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that saved time to spend with their family.

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, a skilled professional would love to have more time to go to a gym, to make their

life

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healthier.

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this

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point

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the company can innovate to keep good professionals working for them.

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is because big techs already

offers

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it,

therefore

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, it looks hard

recruit

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great employers

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, great employers,

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with not good benefits. Yes, the points mentioned above offer strong arguments but

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they

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dont

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don't

talk

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talks

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enough

how

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about how

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to study

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study

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studying

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home

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and work

make

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makes

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life

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student's

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students

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and employer's student

such

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awesome

life

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self learning

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self-learning

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is a terrific point to discuss.

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, learn about your own limits, what you are really good

, what

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at, what

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you can improve,

what

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and what

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you are gifted

but

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at but

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do not know yet.

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, there

are

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a lot of research explaining that work and

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study

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studying

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from

home

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make you more productive. All in all, no

ones

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one

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bothers

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who bothers

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yhe

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the

employer can explain it in the

most good

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best

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form possible, as more productive as more money

done

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did

has done

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. In conclusion, having their jobs and

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study

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studying

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from

homeoffice

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home office

is not the future is the present moment, just need to get out of the big techs bubbles and

beginning

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begin

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being used in medium or small

companys

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companies

company

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
34
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

300 words

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Around the world it is likely that more adults will work from home, and more children will study from home, as computer technology becomes cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this will be a positive or a negative development.

Your opinion

Some people encourage young children to leave their parents' house as soon as they become adults while others say children should stay at their parents' house as long as possible.

Many people choose to travel abroad to learn a foreign language instead of studying in their home town. Do the advantages of learning a new language in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.