Around the world it is likely that more adults will work from home, and more children will study from home, as computer technology becomes cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this will be a positive or a negative development.

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Technology came to make our days easier and improve our quality of

life

Although

it seems difficult to change traditional mores

however

it is necessary to look ahead and go to the

step.

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essay will argue how good can be the benefits of a children

study

from

home

and adults work by

homeoffice

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home office

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it is important to see the prons about it,

such

as saving time doing the job or studying from

home

Nevertheless

, many employers

dont

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don't

know exactly how it can be

usefull

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useful

the manly thing behind

this

thought is

use

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that saved time to spend with their family.

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, a skilled professional would love to have more time to go to a gym, to make their

life

healthier.

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this

point

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the company can innovate to keep good professionals working for them.

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is because big techs already

offers

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it,

therefore

, it looks hard

recruit

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great employers

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, great employers,

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with not good benefits. Yes, the points mentioned above offer strong arguments but

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they

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dont

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don't

talk

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enough

how

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about how

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to study

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study

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studying

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home

and work

make

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makes

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life

student's

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students

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and employer's student

such

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awesome

life

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self learning

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self-learning

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is a terrific point to discuss.

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, learn about your own limits, what you are really good

, what

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at, what

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you can improve,

what

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and what

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you are gifted

but

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do not know yet.

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, there

are

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a lot of research explaining that work and

study

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studying

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from

home

make you more productive. All in all, no

ones

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bothers

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yhe

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the

employer can explain it in the

most good

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form possible, as more productive as more money

done

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. In conclusion, having their jobs and

study

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from

homeoffice

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home office

is not the future is the present moment, just need to get out of the big techs bubbles and

beginning

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being used in medium or small

companys

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companies

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Around the world it is likely that more adults will work from home, and more children will study from home, as computer technology becomes cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this will be a positive or a negative development.

Your opinion

Rich countries should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employers who are from poor countries. Do you agree or disagree.

Scientists have been warning for many years about protecting the environment and that people must limit the use of energy in their daily lives. Despite warnings, many people do not do so. What are the reasons for this and how can people be encouraged to protect the environment?

The picture below shows the difference in the layout of the conference centre in 2010 and 2025.

Some people think that to learn about other countries, they need to travel. Some say that it is not necessary to travel; we can have information through TV and the Internet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.