At the present time, the population of some countries includes relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

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Nowadays, the number of the young adult

population

is usually larger than that of elders in some nations.

This

has certain advantages in several areas and I personally believe that there will have fewer drawbacks compared to benefits.

Firstly

, having more younger

people

obviously means that there have a more workable

population

. Younger

people

are valuable human resources for workplaces as they have strong physical energy, innovation and fresh ideas and they have longer time left to spend at work than older

people

who are getting pinson sooner or are already out of the workplace.

Consequently

, the government have less burden on healthcare and primary education since young adults normally have fewer health problems and they do not require financial assistance from the government in compulsory primary education.

Moreover

, a major

population

of young

people

are entering their respective workplaces and

thus

financially independent. From their annual earnings, they will pay taxes to their governments and

thus

have a more supportive advantage on national budgets.

However

, there have certain disadvantages in

this

case, too. Older

people

have more practical experiences than younger generations and

thus

including fewer older

people

will affect the learning and problem-solving skills of younger

people

since there have fewer peer mentors to teach them based on their personal experiences, which is rare and precious.

This

will affect the way

people

tackle problems at their work and possibly distract the healthy economy.

Although

the government will not have to spend on the primary education system for adults and expect them to take part in the economy, some of them may decide to continue academic studies and may not be ready to enter the business world or real workplaces currently. To conclude,

although

there have possible weaknesses to having fewer older

people

in the

population

than younger

people

, there would have an attractive workforce and tax earnings

on the other hand

Thus

, I personally think that the advantages of

this

situation outweigh the disadvantages.

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At the present time, the population of some countries includes relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

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