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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays
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 have too many opportunities for what they want to do and
people
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 who achieve something can do it more easily than in former times thanks to advanced technological appliances,developed devices or improvements in artificial intelligence.
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,individuals have oodles of options in their lifestyles.Some populations assert that
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 who live in the current
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 have a lot of choices whereas another side claim that
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 who live in the past generation have more choices.From my point of view, we have too many alternatives because of the developed
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 and developed appliances.
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,one of the possibilities of today is the
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. In the past
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, society have no chance to access the
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 because technological devices
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 as computers ,mobile phones or tablets were not commonly used .
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, the population suffered from lots of things
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 as educational reasons ,communication reasons and acquiring knowledge.
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,thanks to the
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 lots of students when they are at their home they do many exercises on many platforms or many
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 can conversation on Whatsapp,Instagram or Imessage
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people
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 may buy anything on digital platforms or they can go to the supermarkets or groceries.
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,
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 don't have to spend
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 shopping ,learning or meeting places with their friends.
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,another alternative of the current
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 is advanced appliances.In the previous ,
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people
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 couldn't provide light and the only way was sunlight so
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 couldn't do anything due to the lighting issue.
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 , after the innovation of lamps,today individuals have lots of different types of lamps and they can study at night ,they may cook or do what they want to do .,
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, another issue was transportation ways .Previously, the public had to ride a horse in order to go anywhere while nowadays
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 have too many ways of transportation
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 as by cars,trains or planes and these ways are very valid and valuable alternatives for transportation because of the
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 and tiredness circumstances. To conclude,when all of these factors are taken into account
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 and developed technological devices play prominent and significant roles in the present era .
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,I totally agree that
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 have too many choices in their lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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