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you friend has been offerd a place on a course a the university where you studied. He would like your advice about a place to live.

#friend #offerd #place #course #university #advice
Dear Ana, It was nice to hear
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form
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 you. I am so happy that you start
your
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college
next
 September. About
this
 time the weather is more
confy
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comfy
.
However
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to find
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 a place to settle is a bit
challenge
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. But I am sure that I can help you with some tips.
First
 off all I will assume that you do not have
such
 a big budget and in that
case
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 I recommend that you want to stay
near
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the University as I did. The suburb
that
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 I lived
called
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 Nepean and it will take about 5 min
by
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 walk to the main student´s build.
Fortunetly
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 I could afford an
apartament
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apartment
 with one bedroom, it was a
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 studio
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 cost
a
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1.000/
mounth
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month
. Just google Nepean´s Studio Block and you will see the same
tipe
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time
type
 that I rented.
Although
 you can search by using google, there are some sites
that
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 you
also
 can look for
resonable
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reasonable
 places. I would say kiji.com or Rentals.com as well.
Then
 just e-mail
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the
landloard
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landlord
 and ask for a visitor. I might be available to go and check some spots if you wish. One
advice
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 that I must tell you
is do
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 not even think to share a place with someone
who
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 you don´t know well.
Besides
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of
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cheaper I had heard dangerous histories
abaout
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about
 stranger people who wants to get advance from
student
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.
For instance
, a friend of mine had all his
bellongins
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belongings
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room mate
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. Don´t do that kind of mistake. I will be here if you need anything.
Also
, I am wondering if you want to be at my house during the
first month
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wich
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 can contribute to
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yourself. Best wishes, Gabriela
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