The Australian government has a policy of turning back the boats of people who attempt to enter Australia illegally. There are people who believe that this is right, but others who think that this is wrong. Examine both sides of this issue and give your own opinion.

Illegal immigration is a problem
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developed countries. In Australia,
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enforces illegal immigrants' ships to return to their origin. It is often claimed that
this
is a policy to protect domestic citizens, while some deem that it is too harsh for refugees. The perspectives for both views are what we will be looking at in
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First
of all, people who
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the restriction of illegal immigration believe that refugees may occupy a lot of social resources.
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needs to provide houses to settle those people. It is no reason to accept illegal immigration without any support.
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should provide public medical
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for them, even though it may raise the burden
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health system. Undeniably,
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has the responsibility to protect
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local residents.
On the contrary
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. In fact, No one wants to leave their home town permanently as long as they can survive at that place. People have to escape from their home
country
because of many reasons,
such
as wars, disease and political reasons. Supporting them can raise the national image of the
country
.
Moreover
, immigrants can contribute additional productivity to
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society. Since manpower is a kind of
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for the
country
as well, more labour can boost the economy.
However
, it may cause
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, like imbalance
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and demand
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labour
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market, underpaying
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and unreasonable working hours. To sum up, allowing illegal immigrants may create
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and bring extra workers
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the
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of the nation. As far as I am concerned,
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should balance the merits and demerits of receiving refugees
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and make sure residents and citizens should have priority
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gaining social benefits.
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