While some people consider global warming to be the most pressing environmental problem which we have at the moment, others think believe that deforestation has more devastating impact on our world. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Many environmental problems

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as water pollution, air pollution and overfishing are happening nowadays. There are some people who say global warming is more and the others say that deforestation has a more impact on our world. In

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essay, I will discuss both opinions and give my opinion. The main causes of

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global warming are greenhouse gases like carbon dioxide and these gases make the weather hotter.

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, Arctic

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is melting at an alarm. I saw various news about animals at the North Pole

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losing their homes because of these. Now scientists believe that there may be no

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60 years later at the North Pole. Decreasing

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sea

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. Imagine the whole

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in the world turns to seawater; some islands and areas may be inundated.

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, a lot of trees are being cut by the people at the moment. The lands more and more fall into disrepair and soil erosions happen. The forest is many animals’ habitat. Deforestation destroys the places for animals, especially primates. Sixty per cent of primates are threatened with extinction today. In conclusion, people can stop deforestation in many ways, but it is difficult to end

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global warming because there are too many plastics are being used and factory is

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, I think global warming has more devastating impacts on the world.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Greenhouse effect
Industrial emissions
Sea levels
Extreme weather events
Biodiversity
Carbon emissions
Renewable energy
Paris Climate Accord
Carbon cycle
Soil erosion
Water cycles
Carbon sequestration
Reforestation
Sustainable forest management
Indigenous communities
Localized impacts

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