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In the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching a large number of students, but now with the development of technology for education, many people think there is no justification for attending lectures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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In the modern era, teaching styles have changed significantly
for
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a few
decade
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 ago. Some people argue that tutors were no longer to teach a large number of
students
 ,due to the advent of technology, online platforms are provided
various
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type
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 of teaching. In
this
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 of the
arguments
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 and
then
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To begin
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online
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 teaching platform is cheaper and there is no
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 time schedule. Nowadays, people don't need to attend
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a class unless they are living in rural and remote areas. In the past, they must
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 far from the areas in order to attend
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school and university. Due to the advent of technology, everyone can learn their education at their home because a tutor can teach via
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 platform whether you are travelling.
In addition
, the cost is extremely cheap so everyone can afford to learn it rather than a traditional teaching method.
However
, a traditional teaching method is more expensive than online learning.
Nevertheless
, there is an advantage
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 learning face to face because
students
 can contact
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tutors.
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, if they have a problem or they don't understand about lectures while pupils can ask directly to their tutors and they don't have to wait for it.
In addition
,
students
 can enhance their knowledge and social abilities. To elaborate
further
, in class, there are a large number of
students
 and they have different ideas and perspectives to solve
this
 problem. From
this
, not only they can learn social skills but
also
 they can improve their general
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. To sum up, I partially agree with these options. I concur that technology is provided us to learn
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everywhere and the
learning's
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 cost is expensive
although
 a traditional learning style can increase our social skills and
knowledges
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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