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Environmental problems such as pollution and climatic variations are increasing nowadays.The governments have taken some measures at a global level.But they got only few solution.Why is it so? How can this problem be solved?

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It is true that many governments have different environmental problems, it is because resolving these problems is not easy.
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 governments have some idea or thought. I'll write some advice on suggested solutions My view on
this
 issue is that
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 has many private cars in the flourishing cities nowadays. The city has many
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 its
densely-population
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.
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why
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governments
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difficult
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to solve
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 the matter.I am of the opinion that can give people coupons for public translation. ,
Moreover
 encourage citizens to take the MTR or bus.That can solve the air pollution problem On the one hand, the garbage issue is seriously affecting our living environment. My suggestion is to reduce the use of plastic bags and recommend using paper bags or bringing your own.Because paper can be recycled. The most important thing is to reduce the impact of garbage smell on nature.But many teenagers do not like to bring bags to go outside, they feel very
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. The issue can be resolved by teaching people how to protect the environment. For ,instance we can show some voices and advertising
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 a lot of people watch it a problem.In primary school and high school, the teacher can tell students we are family and need to together protect the homeland.Global warming still needs to work out. They know how to reduce pollution and
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 on nature when they are young, and they will become protective of their own urban environment when they grow up. That's the butterfly effect. We can see environmental destruction is a big problem ,so we need to focus
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 environmental concerns. Together
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 the ecosystem
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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