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One of the major issues facing the world today is overpopulation. What problems arise from this situation? What measures can be taken to deal with this?

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Increasing the
population
 is one of the main
problems
 coming up in the world these days. Some
problems
 like poverty and
home
 deficiency will be caused, which can be solved by establishing new
jobs
 and building more
homes
. Poverty is one of the major
problems
 that can be caused by overpopulation, especially in developing countries. In every ,society
people
 need to work and
jobs
 with good salary and income which can answer their requirements but if the
population
 will be interested, suitable
jobs
 will not be found for lots of requests that face many
problems
 with their expenses in their life.
Moreover
, the
home
 deficiency will be caused by overpopulation, especially in big
cities
. In spite of every family or even every adult person needing a single
home
 to relax and be calm, most of them should live in shared
homes
 and crowded apartments which have lots of
problems
, or even they should live in shacks around the
cities
. An effective solution to deal with poverty is to create different
jobs
. New factories and companies should be built to employ
people
 or have the idea given to
people
 to make their own business even with less money and develop their skills to earn money by their abilities.
For example
,
people
 who have online shops and even somebody who grows some flowers and vases at their
home
. The
second
 solution is solving
home
problems
 by exporting the
population
 to small
cities
. When small
cities
 will be equipped with whatever is needed , namely health and medical services, sports and
gym
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, education and new
homes
 will be built for
people
 to get relaxed in their own
homes
 many
people
 can move to small
cities
, so the concentration of
population
 will disappear especially in large areas. In conclusion, overpopulation causes lots of
problems
 in the world. It is better to be controlled how possible it is, but there are some solutions to solve the
problems
.
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