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One of the major issues facing the world today is overpopulation. What problems arise from this situation? What measures can be taken to deal with this?

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Increasing the
population
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 is one of the main
problems
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 coming up in the world these days. Some
problems
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 like poverty and
home
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 deficiency will be caused, which can be solved by establishing new
jobs
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 and building more
homes
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. Poverty is one of the major
problems
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 that can be caused by overpopulation, especially in developing countries. In every ,society
people
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 need to work and
jobs
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 with good salary and income which can answer their requirements but if the
population
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 will be interested, suitable
jobs
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 will not be found for lots of requests that face many
problems
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 with their expenses in their life.
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, the
home
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 deficiency will be caused by overpopulation, especially in big
cities
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. In spite of every family or even every adult person needing a single
home
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 to relax and be calm, most of them should live in shared
homes
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 and crowded apartments which have lots of
problems
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, or even they should live in shacks around the
cities
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. An effective solution to deal with poverty is to create different
jobs
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. New factories and companies should be built to employ
people
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 or have the idea given to
people
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 to make their own business even with less money and develop their skills to earn money by their abilities.
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,
people
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 who have online shops and even somebody who grows some flowers and vases at their
home
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. The
second
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 solution is solving
home
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problems
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 by exporting the
population
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 to small
cities
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. When small
cities
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 will be equipped with whatever is needed , namely health and medical services, sports and
gym
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gyms
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, education and new
homes
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 will be built for
people
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 to get relaxed in their own
homes
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 many
people
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 can move to small
cities
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, so the concentration of
population
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 will disappear especially in large areas. In conclusion, overpopulation causes lots of
problems
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 in the world. It is better to be controlled how possible it is, but there are some solutions to solve the
problems
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.
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