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in some countries, there is an increase in the number of parents choosing home education for their children. do the advantage out way the disadvantages.

#countries #parents #home #education #children #advantage
Around the world,
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 of parents
willing
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are willing
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 or choosing the one to one teaching for there their children rather
then
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than
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 sending them to
school
. In
this
essay
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 we will discuss how it
benefit
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to
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student
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 and some disadvantage of it.
To begin
 with, every
parents
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parent
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 always want to give better education to their children, So they can stand in
this
 competitive world. The main advantage of
home schooling
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homeschooling
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 is,
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that
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Teaching will be more focused
towards
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on
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 their feature goals,
teacher
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and teacher
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 can identify their
week
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weak
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 points and concentrate on
that
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them
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. For
instant
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, if
kid
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the kid
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 is weak in
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the match
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match
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matches
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 and good in science,
then
teacher
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the teacher
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 can give more time to teach
match
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 than science. On
other hand
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, in
school
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 one teacher
have
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has
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 to manage many
student
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students
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, and can not focus on
single
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a single
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 pipul. another advantage is,
children
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that children
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 can do extra preparation for feature education in advance, which might not possible in
school
, they have to teach according to predefined subjects only.
Furthermore
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 they can study on
there
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their
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 own
timing
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time
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. when in
school
, need to follow
it's
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its
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timetable
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the timetable
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. Like every coin has two
side
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sides
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,
Home schooling
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Homeschooling
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also
have
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has
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 some disadvantages, like, it is very expensive,
student
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the student
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 will become less social, develop less interest in sport and make
less
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fewer
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 friends. In conclusion,
advantages
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the advantages
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 of kids can study more focused study, and have extra time for feature education and goals. On other hand, not every parent can efforts
this
, and kids will develop less
instrest
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interest
 in physical activity and will be less social.
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