in some countries, there is an increase in the number of parents choosing home education for their children. do the advantage out way the disadvantages.

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curriculum
peer pressure
social skills
formal educational institutions
extracurricular activities
educational content
standardized testing
regulation
tailor (v.)
specialized teachers
controlled environment
family bonds
learning style
educational quality
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in some countries, there is an increase in the number of parents choosing home education for their children. do the advantage out way the disadvantages.

Fully explain your ideas

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Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

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In some countries, more and more people are hiring personal fitness trainers, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes What is the reason for this Is this a positive or negative development