Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion

There are two different opinions on the topic of what to do with an unsatisfactory
job
. It has been claimed that some people think that if you do not have the
job
of dream or the salary is not high enough there is a chance to change the
situation
by finding a new working
place
, but some of them do not agree and believe that the best way just
accept
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the
situation
.
To begin
with, I would like to say, that both points of view have grounds to exist. On the one hand, if a person tries to change his
job
and find better conditions, there is a risk to lose the current
place
and become unemployed at
all
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as the current
situation
in the world is not stable.
On the other hand
, if you stay
on
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your current
place
, there is a possibility to burn out and may receive a depression and start to hate your working
place
for some reasons. And in
this
case, it is worth risking everything. To sum
up
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I would like to say that everything depends on the
situation
, but
personally
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I would try to risk everything as I am not the person, who will work somewhere without passion. It is
also
worth
to mention
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, that if you don’t risk, you will never know.
First
of all, you can start to look for a new
job
without leaving
the
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current
place
.
Secondly
, if you are not satisfied with what you are doing for a living, try to learn something else, nowadays there are a lot of distant courses for those who want to learn a new profession.
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