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Many companies sponsor sports as a way of advertising themselves. Some people think this is good for the world of sport, while others think it is a negative. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, the issue of companies’ sponsorship in
sports
 has been a subject of heated debate. Some people assert that the corporation’s
investment
 in
sports
 is
good
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affect
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 on the
sport
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 areas
although
it`s
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 main aim is advertising
themselves
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 while others argue
otherwise
. Personally, I strongly agree with the former stance. In
this
 essay, the views and reasons will be exerted before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
One
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 the one hand,
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sone
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some
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 believe that corporate sponsorship of
sports
 which aims to their advertisement has a bad effect on the development of
sports
 because it often threatens fair play in
sports
.
For example
, athletes can get more companies’ sponsorship as many as win their games.
This
 leads to sportsmen often playing unfairly. In fact, recent research has shown that over 60
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 of people think that baseball which
is has
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 the largest
investment
 of corporations is the most unfair
sports
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 in Korea. In my point of view,
however
 companies’
investment
 in
sports
 could
leads
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 to the development of
sports
 even if
it's
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 purpose is advertising their products because it helps many sportsmen who suffered from financial
problem
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 despite
of
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potential good ability.
Furthermore
, companies’ money
also
 can improve the facilities of
sports
 while the government could not do it because of a lack of money. In conclusion, is a contentious topic because there are opinions that support and oppose
this
 basic idea.
However
, after considering
this
 matter in a careful manner, I personally believe that the advantages of companies’
investment
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sports
 for their advertising far outweigh the drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sponsorship
  • advertisement
  • financial support
  • visibility
  • popularity
  • athletes
  • excel
  • healthy competition
  • commercialization
  • fair competition
  • profits
  • well-being
  • exclusion
  • less popular sports
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