Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Nowadays someone believed that they
are buy
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some unnecessary thing by
effect
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of the
advertisement
but some other one said
advertisement
help them to find new products
can
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improve their life, I totally agree with the
second
view, which has
support
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me to find new
product
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products
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may have
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changed
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change
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my lifestyle during the time.
Everyday
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some
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apply
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new and invented product come to the market by a group of factories in the world. Advertisements
such
as physical and digital not only help the
people
to aware
about
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it but
also
help companies to
increasing
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the rate of selling in the market.
Unfortunately
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some of
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agency
work
to affect
people
buy
some thing
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something
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without make benefit for
buyer
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the buyer
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. In 2019 when
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the Corona
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Corona virus
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Coronavirus
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came and changed the type of
the
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apply
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work
and
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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, every
people
in the world used to buy
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something
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some thing
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something
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with just
advertisement
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advertisements
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especially
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online
advertisement
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advertisements
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.
In
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that time,
Me
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I
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same
as
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like
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another
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other
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people
must
work
remotely and my
jobs
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job
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related to the digital facilities devices
such
as
scanner
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scanners
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and
printer
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printers
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, so I decided to road some comments and saw
online
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an online
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advertisement
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advertisements
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to find
a
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the
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best choice for me. Fortunately, it
is
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works
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work
better than when I shop in the mall and spend a lot of time in the traditional
bazar
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. In conclusion, advertisements are made to help
the
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people
and factories. So, it is important to filter them and find a way to
used
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it
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them
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correctly by updating their knowledge about the new factories and
product
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products
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come
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that come
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to the market routinely.
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