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You have had a class discussion about what can be done to improve your city’s air pollution problem. Your teacher has asked you to write an essay (170-200 words) providing solutions to the problem.

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Air pollution is a very serious problem in the whole world which leads to global warming. Its causes include the burning of fossil fuel and firewood, smoke released from factories, volcanic eruptions, forest fires, bombardment, asteroids, carbon oxides and many more. Despite that,most people continue doing these things. So, what could we do to solve
this
 problem? One solution is to start using cars
less
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For instance
, you can use public transport to get to the desired destination. By doing
this
,no gasses are emitted from the vehicle into the atmosphere. Another solution to the problem is to encourage carpool schemes.
For example
, when your family is going on a holiday they can use only one vehicle. In
this
 way, you can contribute to fewer cars on the road, which means less traffic congestion, less greenhouse gas emissions, less pollution of the air and less consumption of resources. All things considered, there are ways to reduce air pollution in cities . To live a safe and healthy life on Earth, people need to follow the rules, take necessary measures, and be more responsible and concerned about the environment.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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