Behaviour in schools is getting worse. Explain the causes and effects of this problem and suggest some possible solutions.

Nowadays we can notice that the discipline of
students
in school is much worse than before. Sadly,
this
tendency is getting even more actual day by day and we are obliged to search for solutions
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this
problem
. But before we start to think about possible ways for solving
this
problem
we must learn more about the roots of that
problem
. The
first
cause is obvious and simply - the times when schools were the place of high knowledge are
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in the present it’s not some kind of
privelege
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privilege
now because
governmets
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governments
are mostly offer
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free or very cheap ways for children to study in school.
Second
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reason caused by the
first
, total freedom for
students
sounds good but will never work like it
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to be. After we found out the possible reasons
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bad
behavior
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in school we can start to think
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to solve these problems. Would be great to return
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traditions of
educations
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in our century but
such
a big step is almost impossible for
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amount of countries. In that case, we should find more realistic ways
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problem solving
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. I offer the slight reformation in
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educational system where
students
diciplined
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disciplined
students
will be separated from mad ones. Another and probably the
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to solve
problem
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the problem
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is that
governements
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governments
don’t want to spend a lot of money
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any reforms and
this
problem
impossible
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to resolve. To sum it
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our level in
country’s
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laws system we can’t decide how to improve even
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of our
students
because it causes only more
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. I can only advise
to
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spend more time with your child and learn
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about him
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or her
dicipline
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discipline
and rights of
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behaviour
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in society.
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