Some people believe that using social media instead of watching television at young ages. How are the advantages and disadvantages of this topic?

The definition of social
media
is "The relationships that exist between
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network
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networks
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of
people
".It is no doubt true by some professionals that using social
media
is more popular than watching television at young
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.I would argue that everybody enjoys using applications like
facebook
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,messenger,
instagram
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,u tube and others despite
of
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having
few
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drawbacks.
On the other hand
,there are many suitable benefits for
this
topic.Nowadays,all
people
must know the international news happening all over the world within a few
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seconds
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as they have to go to more places and do more things.
In other words
,most
of
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people
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can know the latest news through a very small screen which
promote
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some
informations
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information
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such
as famous actors and actresses ,popular football matches and so on.In olden times,only the invention of TV has led to
people
too
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much sedentary.
That is
very unhealthy.Another reason that using social
media
is that it would help education growth.As the world is being
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modernized
one
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,
people
can communicate
to
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one another
with
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online and they can learn foreign languages from various websites.
Therefore
,they can create their beautiful
futre
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future
together with
ours'
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hands.
On the other hand
,there are obvious disadvantages to using social
media
.
Firstly
,it would mean that
people
can suffer from unexpected health issues if they use it all the time.In my view,most
of
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teenagers
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spend their precious time
in
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doing
this
.So,they always take absence for their
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homework
.Another negative
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of using social
media
is
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that basic
people
can feel depressed and discontented with their ordinary lives
who
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and
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have only a small amount of money to spend on luxuries when advertisers post their expensive sellings on
facebook
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Facebook
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.Of course,we may know that they are
liers
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liars
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. In summary,the population of social
media
platforms will only lead to a greater amount of internet users
instead
of fewer ones.In my
opnion
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opinion
,we may not spend our time only on using
this
.
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