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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People have differing views about spending huge amounts of budgets on transportation systems. Some individuals believe that using them on developing new railway roads that can travel from cities to cities is the best
opition
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while others hold the
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that upgrading current public transit is more suitable. I will describe the pros and cons of both sides in
this
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 essay along with my perspective. On the
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 hand, advocates of the
trains
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 point out that
trains
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 have a big contribution to the fields of travelling which is
one
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 of the main factors
of
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in

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 improving countries' economy. That's why building more railway roads with fast
trains
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 can indirectly affect the financial growth of
one
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 country.
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,
trains
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 consume fewer fuels compared to cars and buses.
Therefore
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, business companies use
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the train
a train

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train
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trains

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 as
major
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a major

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 transportation system for carrying goods from
one
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 place to another.
However
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, constructing railways
need
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 a lot of investments and commitments from authorities as it
also
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 needs many latest
trains
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 and takes
huge
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 amount of time and no
one
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 can tell expenditures
of
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apply

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 will be covered in how many years. On the other
hands
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, supporters of public transport highlight that improving public
transports
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transport

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 will surely have
higher
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a higher

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 standard
living
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of living

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 for citizens.
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, people could not only go to jobs in time which results in increasing the productivity of the city but
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 go home early and rest
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 would make them refresh their minds due to the easy
transisting
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transiting
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vehicles.
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, they can visit
one
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 place to another with ease without worrying about
traffics
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 anymore.
Nevertheless
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, cars and buses which are the main existing public
transports
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 are contributing
in
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 the major causes of releasing carbon dioxide into the atmosphere which can harm the
healths
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health

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 of humans. In a nutshell, I pen down saying that I am of the
opition
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of allocating big
amout
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amount
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of money to
trains
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 which can make the country's economy better and less environmental damaging effects.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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