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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities have become more isolated. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays the online web has become increasingly popular across the world. Many are of the opinion that the internet has bridged gaps between people, whereas there are those who disagree entirely, believing that we are now more distant than ever before. In my opinion, we do indeed have deeper bonds today because of the world wide web. Has cyberspace had more adverse impacts on relations? I will analyze both sides of
this
 argument with supporting examples herein. On the one hand, The net allows for easier communication with loved ones regardless of location.
Moreover
, as many accept jobs in different parts of the world, the loss of family connections is eliminated due to social media applications and video calling.
For instance
,while I now live in the Uk and the rest of my family are in China, I am still in touch with those whom I love dearly via social media tools which have had a significant impact on me.
Therefore
, it has removed the daunting task of maintaining relations when living away from family and friends.
On the other hand
,
as a result
 of overuse of
this
 tool, many have become rather antisocial demonstrating a propensity to depend strictly on their devices to make contact.
Furthermore
, the lack of physical contact has created a major divide among young people
in particular
 who prefer online virtual relations to personal ones. To illustrate, A recent Harvard University study revealed that 62% of teenagers in New York spend their time virtually engaging in relationships
instead
 of meeting their friends or partners in real life.
Thus
, It is apparent that the effects of the information highway are dangerous and might cause one to become depressed as people opt for a lonely life
instead
. In closing, there are clearly pluses and minuses to online exploration.
Nevertheless
, I maintain that we can all reap the benefits if we use it well,
although
this
 might not always be realistic. If teenagers used the web for its benefits, they would remove all potential drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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