Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

It is thought by some specialists that starting learning a
second
language
at the primary level is better than at the secondary level. I think the downside of
this
outweighs the upside because young
pupils
may have a great workload
as a result
. On the one hand, young
pupils
are better
language
learners than older ones. Primary school-aged children are at an early stage of learning and
therefore
tend to be very open to new ideas. That to say, they are less likely to find the
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pronunciation and grammar of a foreign
language
strange and difficult to learn than their counterparts
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secondary school.
However
, I do not think
this
gives them a major advantage in life because many people become successful either financially or professionally, without mastering a
second
language
.
On the other hand
, studying a new
language
at primary school can greatly increase young
pupils
' workloads. One more
language
to learn means more classes to take and more school work to do.
For instance
, in Egypt, where English is compulsory at all primary schools. Egyptian
pupils
spent often around half an hour every weekday just on their English homework.
Moreover
, to outperform their peers, many of them join weekend English classes.
Consequently
, I think
this
puts young
pupils
at a great disadvantage because
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this
age, they should spend more time enjoying leisure activities than burying themselves in academic tasks. In conclusion,
although
primary school-aged children tend to be good at acquiring a foreign
language
, I believe
this
advantage is far outweighed by the disadvantages of the heavy workloads that come with it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • pronunciation
  • self-conscious
  • cultural awareness
  • global society
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