Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Music
is, without a doubt, the food to our souls. While some people
believe that it can bring people
of different backgrounds and ages together, I agree with them only to a certain extent. The reason why I do not agree wholeheartedly is that I think there are more important ways, other than music
, which can get people
closer.
It is a fact that musical pieces can slightly close the culture gap. The reason for this
is, as people
say, that it is a universal language which can cross the barrier of different tongues. When a person listens to Beethoven, for instance
, the music
touches him, regardless of what language he speaks or what part of the world he is from. In my opinion, this
is an incredible power that music
has over us.
However
, albeit its universality, I do not believe that it has a significant role in bringing people
together. There are better alternatives that could make them understand each other despite their differences, one of which is stories
. This
is because stories
have been humans' way of communicating their emotions and thoughts since the invention of language. Stories
have been passed between generations, by word of mouth at first
, then
by the written word. To illustrate, we currently understand ancient religions and cultures thanks to stories
from the Illiad more than the music
of the time.
To sum up, I partially agree that music
can contribute to a universal understanding between cultures and countries, nevertheless
, I believe that stories
can be a more efficient way to reach this
goal.Submitted by aymanshabakaa on
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