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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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A lot of
people
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 in today's world believe that social sites
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 as
Facebook
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 have negatively impacted both individuals and society. I totally believe
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 statement because it serves as a distraction to a lot of
people
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 to tend to focus on their work or studies but are unable to.
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 with, I agree with
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 who believe that social media sites
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 as
Facebook
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 have caused a huge distraction in
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's lives over the years, as
people
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 tend to spend their day surfing profiles.
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,
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 reduces the global output as
people
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 keep on procrastinating their work and
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 achieve very less per day.
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, there was an article published in a newspaper which states that heavily increased usage of
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 leads to fraudulent activities.
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,
people
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 come into the trap and invest their crucial time and money.
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, online applications have created opportunities for fraudulent individuals to set up a trap for common
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.
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,
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 affects the individuals and sometimes they tend to lose their valuable items and even get blackmailed.
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, there was a report in the Sun newspaper showed that over 300 billion dollars were lost to cyber theft worldwide.
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, a special warning should be raised to
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 not to disclose their personal information and stay alert to
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 traps. In conclusion,
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 does not only have a negative impact but
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 a positive impact too, it allows you to talk to
people
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 sitting in a different country. It
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, helps you keep in touch with your friends and family and at the same time avails cybercriminals activities
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 as blackmailing, sending unnecessary links, and setting up traps to earn
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's
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 money.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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