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Band 7

Should a city try to preserve its old, historic buildings or destroy them and replace them with modern buildings? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Some people believe that a city should try to preserve its old,historic bulidings
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 some argue that historical structure should be demolished and replaced by modern infrastructure .
Although
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 there are valid arguments on both sides I strongly contend that they should be preserved for ecomical growth and to protect our
history
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. The advocates of advanced infrastructure believe that the changes in architect of
buildings
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 can enhance comfort and convience.
However
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,replacing old
buildings
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 means loosing the
history
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 .These
buildings
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 arent just bricks and colors .They are link to our ancestors.We can have a deep insight on the resources,skills and technique used by them to build imfrastructures 100 years ago.If we demolish them the future generation will loose that connection to the
history
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 .The architecture of
buildings
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 can help us to know more about the culture, tradition and lifestyle as different forms of art are present in those
buildings
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 which depicts the lives of people living in the past. Another significant advantages of preserving infrasturcture is the economical growth it brings
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 tourism industry.Old monuments attract tourists and learners who are intrested in
history
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,art and culture.The tourism industry is floursing in many countries which are protecting them.It can be best illustrated by the example of Pyramids of Egypt .It is considered as one of the seven wonders of world.
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, it is attracting significant number of tourists who spend money to visit the place.
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 has resulted in ecomical growth for Egypt. In conclusion,I would state that despite the comfort and convienence modern infrastuture can provide we should not destroy old
buildings
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 as they have numerous advantages in economical prospect and preservation of
history
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.

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planning
Plan your answer before you write. Make two or three strong reasons and give one example for each.
linking
Use simple links to show how ideas go with each other, like 'and', 'but', 'so', 'for example'.
grammar
Fix small mistakes in spelling and form, such as 'careful','convenience','infrastructure','examples'
structure
Make your view clear in the first part and restate it at the end.
content
The writer shows a clear view that old buildings should be kept.
example
An example from history (the pyramids) is used.
content
The essay brings many ideas: history, money, and culture.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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