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Many people today are worried about cybercrime such as hacking and identity theft . what problem does cyber crime cause, and what solution can you suggest for ordinary people and business to take?

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In today's world, with the advancement of technology
people
 are becoming more and more advance. A lot of
people
 nowadays are worried about cybercrime
such
 as hacking and identity theft. There are a lot of problems cybercrime causes to the common man like blackmailing, hacking, and setting up a trap to rob
people
's hard-earned money. I agree that
this
 should have a solution whenever an ordinary man faces some problem.
Firstly
,
to begin
 with,
people
 in today's world use social media sites to blackmail and set a trap for ordinary
people
.
In addition
, cybercriminals tend to enter into
user's
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 systems by sending unnecessary links
,
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 and calling
people
 by becoming fake bank agents and asking for their OTPs. If a person passes on the OTP without verifying the identity
then
 he may tend to lose all his money from the account.
As a result
, more a more
people
 are becoming a victim of
this
 scenario.
However
, every problem could be handled conveniently if given some time and resources. Government should set up a fast pacing cyber stations, where
people
 can report their complaints.
Furthermore
, it's in
people
's hands to not open any unwanted links which may lead to unnecessary activities
such
 as downloading viruses in the background, transferring computer data, and mirroring the user system.
Also
,
people
 should not share their OTPs with any other person whom they don't know, as
this
 could lead them to lose all of their hard-earned money.
Moreover
, everyone should check websites before filling out any necessary details to avoid any sort of hacking later. In conclusion,
although
people
 are becoming smarter day by day, still they land up with either of the troubles mentioned above. It is more in our hands than anyone else's,
people
 should be self-responsible before giving out details. Various TV advertisements are
also
 coming to make
people
 aware before they try to do anything.
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