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An increasing number of people are changing careers during their working life. What do you think are the reasons of this? Is it a positive or a negative development for society?

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This
 report sets out to identify the possible root causes of
energy
usage
 that has not been reduced and propose a recommendation to improve the situation as there is a reduction in
hotel
 guests, causing the profits of the
hotel
 to suffer.
This
 report documents
efforts
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 of the team from September to December 2023; observing the people in the
hotel
 and their
energy
usage
, finding out ways
on
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how to reduce the
energy
 level in the Heritage House
Hotel
 and
,
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 if so,
to discuss
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 with the team
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how to move towards sustainability and attaining the Green Mark Certification by the end of 2024 which will help the
hotel
 gain new segments of guests and maintain business sustainability. A variety of research
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 used in gathering data and analysis.
Firstly
, a focus group discussion was conducted to find out the root cause of why the
energy
usage
 in the
hotel
 has not been reduced.
Secondly
, upon identifying the root cause, a survey was conducted to find out the main driver of the
energy
usage
 that has not been reduced.
Lastly
, online research was conducted to gather suitable ideas on how to reduce the
energy
usage
 level in the
hotel
.
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