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In theie advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays
people
 advertising their businesses more and more and
also
 advertising the new
products
. I will discuss why
people
 advertising more and I will give the details of both positive and negative points about
this
 development. Generally speaking, nowadays
people
 have a hard schedule to take
time
 for shopping and choice the new
products
 because they have 9 to 5 jobs and after ,that they have to give
time
 family after person
also
 want my
time
.
To begin
 with, most companies think that if they have more advertising new
products
then
people
 are able to see the most important features of that
product
 and up-gradation of that
product
products
 and I think that will help
people
 to choose the
product
 in their free
time
.
For example
, when
people
 have break
time
 they are able to see the advertising by watching the videos during can see the best feature of the
product
. On the one hand, if the
company
 does more advertising
people
 getting more disturb by a few minutes of business advertising will play the video.
Therefore
, these are not most important because if the
company
 is not given more advertising
then
 how the flight with other companies
company
 and how they earn the money. current
time
 everyone wants to set up their own businesses because they don't want to do the nine to five jobs or they want to earn more money that's why an increasing number of
company
people
 can't fight the other
company
 without advertising their
products
.
On the other hand
, I still believe that the advertising of own businesses is very important and it is a positive for development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Competition
  • Consumer demand
  • Novelty
  • Innovation
  • Progress
  • Differentiation
  • Attract
  • Generate
  • Interest
  • Positive aspect
  • Negative aspect
  • Emphasize
  • Balancing
  • Quality
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