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Some people think that it is beneficial for children to do paid work, while others think it can be harmful for children. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children doing paid work?

#people #children #work
Paid
work
to
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children
always
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be
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 a controversial subject in recent decades. Some people think that it is
advantages
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 to
children
 while others think its
harm
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to
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children
. On the one hand, supporters of
this
 argument
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are concern
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concern
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 that paid
work
 is an opportunity
to
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children
learning
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 and
they
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can reduce the financial stress on their
family
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families
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.
Children
 are more respected
to
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them
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their
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parent
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parents
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 as they
understanding
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 how hard their parents were.
Moreover
, they may
work
 harder at school because aware that only knowledge can change their life.
For example
, a
ten year old
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 boy unwilling
study
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 and always late to school, his father
send
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 him to his factory
worked
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 for a week. After
this
 week , the boy aware the how lucky he was and he study very hard and never
be
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was
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 late again. The supporter believe paid
work
 is a good experience
to
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children
grow
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 up.
On the other hand
, opposite viewers think that childhood should be play and
study
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,
work
 for money is too stressful
to
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children
. Most of the
job
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jobs
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, have to communicate with other people,
they
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and they
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 may not
mature
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be mature
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 and skilful enough to solve the abrupt problem. It will reduce their confidence and confidence is one of the most
importance
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important
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feature
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features
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 to be
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a success
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success
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successful
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. Confidence
children
 are better able to copy
with
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peers
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peers'
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 stress , challenge, drawback, and positive and negative emotion. Building
children
's self-confidence and learning knowledge is the
first
 priority. In conclusion, both sides have
it
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their
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 advantages and disadvantages but I believe
than
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 if it is possible
let
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children
 enjoy their childhood, earning money is not their responsibility.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • beneficial
  • harmful
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • financial independence
  • responsibility
  • valuable skills
  • impact
  • education
  • exploitation
  • negative effects
  • social life
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