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In today’s World of advance science and technology, Many people value artist. What can the art tell us about life that science cannot.

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There are close to 8 billion
people
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 in the world; Everyone has a different set of interests. In the modern era where technology is booming and advanced research is being conducted still there’re a large group that gives importance to the artist. In the upcoming paragraphs, one is going to debate
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 views and evolve a conclusion out of them.
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 with, Each and every human on the planet is dependent on the development of
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 and technology. From infrastructure, modern facilitated labs, the Digital World, and telecommunication to advanced medicins are boons of
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. These innovations have not only helped to enhance comfort but
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 helped boost economic status.
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,
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 these days are heavily dependent and survival without
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 is
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, an Internet shutdown can cause a huge loss to a company. On the other side, scientific inventions can’t give you happiness. As per a survey conducted by WHO 1 out of 10
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 suffers from hypertension, depression, anxiety, or stress. And the number is going to rise by 10% by 2030. Here
Art
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 can play a major role. The
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 can become a healer here. A person can express their feelings in form of painting or music. There are worship
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, where
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 just go and disconnect themselves from the outer world to look for inner peace. In the past 10 years, there has been a huge rise in
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 worship
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. To conclude,
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 and
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 are like a coin where
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 represent each side. If
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 is life
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science
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 keeps moving the life. They
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 compliments each other and survival without it is
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 to impossible. If we combine
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 of them, it can be a powerful reality.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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