It will be better to have wide use of driverless car for individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

The
transport
sector
is highly
contraversial
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controversial
on how it can be better
such
that certain demography states it can only be
productive
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produced
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with a well-designed
transport
system.In
addittion
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addition
with advancement in
technology
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,technology
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this
sector
can perform way better
comparing
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compared
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to other fundamental departments.It will be
prefferable
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preferable
to have extensive use of driverless machines for independents and
community
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.I concur with the mentioned statement with
reason
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the reason
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being it is reliable and efficient and
road
safety
is
well taken
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care
off
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.
To begin
with,driverless machines are reliable and efficient unlike where there use of
a
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drivers
that
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apply
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make
transport
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the transport
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sector
unreliable and inefficient due to
a great deal of
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a lot of
many
plenty of
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distructions
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distractions
which
draw
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draws
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drivers
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drivers'
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attention from the
road
.
In addition
,
road
safety
is indispensable which is an added merit when using driverless
automobile
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automobiles
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comparing
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compared
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to drivers who put
the
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society at risk when they drive while tired or drunk.For
instant
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,
a
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recent research from Nairobi university
indicate
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80
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that 80
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% of developed country advocates for
such
automobiles.
Therefore
,with the
technology
at hand
safety
and a reliable
transport
sector
should be manageable.
Secondly
,
loss
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the loss
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of jobs which will lead to criminals increases since
pilots
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pilots'
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duties are taken over despite the new
develpoment
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development
of
technology
.
In
addition
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many families get
affectted
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affected
such
that they go hungry since the resources from
operator
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the operator
an operator
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is
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are
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nolonger
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no longer
available.
For
example
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a
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apply
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recent research from
University
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the University
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of Nairobi
indicate
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60
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that 60
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% of engineers have lost
job
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a job
the job
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in developing countries.
Therefore
,despite
technology
improving
on
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in
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this
sector
,
there
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their
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drawbacks
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are drawbacks
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to
the
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apply
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society
such
as job loss and criminals. To sum up,driveless motorists are being prefered because it is reliable and efficient and
road
safety
become established.
However
,
transport
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the transport
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sector
need
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needs
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to balance the use of
technology
and welfare of the society,
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