Some people feel that the government should regulate the level of violence in films on TV and at the cinema. Others feel that violent films should not be regulated. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is a debatable topic among different sections of
society
whether governments should restrict violent content in movies
or not. I vehemently espouse that the degree of violence
in films on TV
and at the cinema
should be regulated by the authorities as these
can increase the crime rate and leave bad impacts on children.
Correct pronoun usage
this
To begin
with, there are many reasons why some people
are in favor
of limiting the Change the spelling
favour
violence
presented on TV
and at the cinema
in films because it can directly increase the criminal activities in the society
. To clarify, bad things may impact more on human
brain so Add an article
the human
such
violent Correct your spelling
much
movies
can stimulate criminal thinking among people
. Hence
, people
not only can get an idea from these movies
to plan brutal activities, but also
they may not hesitate to harm other people
. In addition
, such
violent movies
can be a reason for the bad behavior
of Change the spelling
behaviour
young
generation Correct article usage
the young
especially
children. After watching these Add the comma(s)
,especially
movies
on TV
and at the cinemas, young ones may become disrespectful to their family members and friends. To cite an example, a survey conducted by The Guardian newspaper in March,
2015 revealed that 35% of youngsters had been behaving badly Remove the comma
apply
with
other Change preposition
toward
people
of
the Change preposition
in
society
since they started watching violent films on TV
and at the cinema
.
On the other hand
, many people
are against of
the idea of putting Change preposition
apply
Add an article
a restriction
restriction
on Fix the agreement mistake
restrictions
violence
in movies
as they believe these movies
are just for the
entertainment purposes. To expatiate, a large number of Correct article usage
apply
people
are inclined to watching
brutal Wrong verb form
watch
movies
because they feel such
movies
interesting
and enjoyable to decrease their Add a missing verb
are interesting
work related
stress. Add a hyphen
work-related
Hence
, as all scenes of such
movies
are directed by experts and often not real so people
can enjoy this
cheap source of entertainment. Moreover
, some violent movies
ramp up the attentiveness among people
. To exemplify, many violent movies
describe the way to impart the knowledge of many methods which people
can use at
the time of emergencies like robbery and criminal Change preposition
in
attack
.
To conclude, Fix the agreement mistake
attacks
though
a section of Correct word choice
although
society
believes that there should be no restriction on the level of violence
shown in movies
in
Change preposition
on
TV
and at the cinema
, I advocate the belief of other section
of Fix the agreement mistake
sections
society
to regulate it so the increase in crime
cases and Replace the word
criminal
behavioral
changes may not Change the spelling
behavioural
increased
due to these.Change the verb form
increase
be increased
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