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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

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The Internet has brought significant changes to the way people access new information and knowledge.
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, some individuals believe that readers may cease to buy traditional books or newspapers since these data are gratis online. Personally, I think that physical books will certainly outsell e-books for the following reasons.
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 services, including online valuable worthwhile information, is wholly free. Even if people are permitted to read the online reading materials free of charge, they have to purchase smartphones and pay internet bills, which is probably beyond the bounds of possibly of those who have low income and reside in areas with poor internet connection.
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 for full access. More importantly, there are spectrums of valuable and academic knowledge only given license to distribute printed versions.
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, absorbing online recourses via phone or computer produces a sense of distraction or interruption. Screen pop-up notifications of messages, advertisements or tabloids are the biggest disturbance when reading online. In reality, the sense of Fear of Missing Out Phenomenon (FOMO) forces readers to read the notice and be attracted by these fascinating visual contents on social
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 or newspapers.
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, eyestrain is probably another cause of discontinuity because reading or gazing at
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 without intermissions results in tired and painful eyes, which contributes less concentration than reading paper and ink format of news. All
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 since paying charges as well as being tough to focus
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 the most drawbacks of online reading.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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