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Advertising encourages people to buy in quantity rather to consider quality. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #quantity #quality
Manufacturers and producers and all the experts in the marketing field use advertising to introduce and encourage people to buy those
products
 and I believe, most of these advertisements are shown off because they are prepared for more
sales
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss
this
 issue
then
 followed by my point of view. As we know advertising is the best and most effective way to introduce a product to ordinary people and
also
 provides a desirable condition for more
sales
. In fact, advertisers have a goal
that is
 a more and more
sales
then
 gain more profit so they do not have concerned about the quality of goods even worse, the kind of
products
 and in terms of unhealthy
products
such
 as cigarettes. They have responsibility about their employers who are companies owner or
sales
 manager
in addition
, they should make adverts which encourage people to buy those
products
 Completely excited and thoughtless.
On the other hand
, the majority of individuals tend to purchase some
products
 which become trends because they like to follow fashion. They prefer to use popular and well-known
products
 from food to cosmetics and clothes even sometimes some services
such
 as beauty care,
for instance
, they might find a creative commercial on the billboard and decide immediately to buy that. In conclusion, I completely agree with
this
 issue which advertisement can affect our taste, idea as well as consumption patterns about a product or service
also
 it can encourage us to buy some goods without any deep thinking and even without any need.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumerist behavior
  • Longevity
  • Durability
  • Discounts
  • Bulk purchases
  • Limited-time offers
  • Fear of missing out (FOMO)
  • Minimalism
  • Sustainable purchasing
  • Craftsmanship
  • Superior materials
  • Societal values
  • Short-term gratification
  • Long-term satisfaction
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