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Some people think that you can never become fluent in a language unless you have spent time living or working in that country. To what extent do you agree?

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 present,
people
 tend to think that you can never become fluent in a
language
 unless you have spent time living or working in that
country
. I greatly disagree with
this
 statement and I will be discussing the reason I disagree.
Firstly
, I think that
people
 just need to have native
people
 of that
country
 talking to them on a daily basis. When you go to their
country
 there is no guarantee that you will learn from what they are saying or understand their
language
. Looking at the stats show that
people
 learn more from talking to the native than from living in the
country
. In my experience, my school have lots of American teachers, but most of them are not fluent in the Thai
language
.
On the other hand
, you can find the native more easily from living in that
country
 than living in another
country
. You might have more conversation and increased usage of reading because of the sign around you. In the modern days,
this
 is not always the case because
people
 travel more often.
This
 causes every
country
 to have a translation in every sign and
people
 from that
country
 have more chances of speaking another
language
. The effectiveness of learning might decrease because of
people
 trying to speak your
language
 or having a sign in your
language
. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with
this
 statement.
Although
, living in that
country
 might encourage you to learn more, but not for everyone. In the modern days, there will be more use of your
language
 all over the world. You should commit to finding natives to talk to and let them help you improve your
language
.
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