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Describe a historical era you are interested in When was this era How you learn about it What it was famous for Explain why you are interested in

I would like to talk about a historical era I am very impressed
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 the Indochina War and it happened in my country which is Vietnam, I learned about it in
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high school
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highschool
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. The primary reason why I chose that moment
because
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 that time had made a huge number of real heroes. Among them, I admire the most is Vo Thi
Sau
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 sister. She taught me how to
confident
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be confident
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 when
face
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 any difficult situation as well as strong enemies.
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, I learned a lot about patience through Vietnam soldiers when they did deal with significant moments. In effect, the Indochina War affected not only my nation but
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 worldwide. As I said before, it was well-known for making huge of real heroes.
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, I was pretty proud of my country's history.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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