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Universities should accept equal number of male and female student in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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We have come a long way since the days when
women
 were denied getting
an
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education. To
this
 day, in some cultures,
females
 pursuing a college degree is not a priority and is seen as a form of luxury. And now, some people argue that universities should accept
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 number of male and female students in every major. There is no doubt that some majors are better suited to men than
women
 and vice versa. In
this
 case, limiting the number of one gender can improve the final outcome.
For instance
, if more
females
 are able to sit for sewing or fashion classes,
then
 more
females
 will be able to work or run their own brands in a male-dominated industry.
On the other hand
, it is imperative that equal opportunities
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 provided for both sexes regardless of the subject being studied.
This
 means that there would be a balance in job fields that would normally prefer one gender over the other. Men or
women
 will be able to break stereotypes set against them in their relative field. That could be
for example
, that
females
 can prove to be better engineers than males. Overall, in my opinion, I believe that equal opportunities for both men and
women
 should be a set standard in our everyday life whether it is taking classes or applying for jobs or voting rights.
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