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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, sharing
information
 become common due to technological development. Some people consider as much
information
 to be shared as possible in various arena
such
 as
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 scientific research, business and the university,
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 excellence. Meanwhile, others argue that some
information
 is fascinating and high valuable to let it shared without restrictions. In
this
 essay, I will discuss how sharing
information
 would benefit numerous things in individuals and in society.
To begin
 with, the advanced technology that the world saw in the
last
 decade is merely due to sharing
information
 in several areas. To illustrate, in different universities across the world, they are studying physics based on old scientists that are not born in their countries
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 Albert Einstein, the most famous scientist in history. Due to his theories and research, physic now is at another level that benefits humanity to discover numerous and till these days, many researchers still rely on these theories. What is more, the light
that is
 considered the best invention in historic science, there is a huge chance that it cannot reach someplace around the world if they did not share the
information
 on how it would work or occur.
Thus
, many things in our life could not be in nowadays
such
 as TV, laptop, and smartphones.
On the other hand
, sharing
information
 should be controlled or at least some conditions or restrictions to allow sharing the
information
.
For instance
, numerous medicines could be dangerous, if the patients did not follow the instructions or take overdose due to the lack of
information
 that had been shared without putting some regulations on it.
Therefore
,
this
 kind of sharing can harm individuals and communities. To sum up, it is essential to share
information
 that would have many benefits on people's lifestyles,
nevertheless
, it ought to be aware of a handful of
information
 by putting some regulations on it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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