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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Nowadays, technology is advancing in every aspect and the critical sector of food production is not an exception. Modern approaches and equipment are introduced on a regular basis.
However
, the number of
people
 suffering from hunger is not decreasing.
This
 issue can be due to several factors and there can be a number of solutions to tackle
this
problem
, which I am going to discuss in
this
 essay. A major
problem
 is that the newer techniques of farming require expensive sophisticated tools and knowledge, which are not easily possible for all
countries
 to obtain. The farmers in underdeveloped
countries
 cannot afford to purchase these machines and often continue with traditional methods.
In addition
, large flat land is a necessity to apply the novel agriculture approaches for more and faster production.
This
 is not available in many
countries
 that have mountainous environments. On top of that, more production does not necessarily mean more food for everybody, as the crops are not distributed equally among
people
. Despite the abundance of grains, the prices are high in poorer
countries
 due to financial problems.
Therefore
, the majority of the population in
such
countries
 is still struggling to put food on the table. But there can be solutions to
this
problem
. The governments of the nations with a low agricultural output should subsidize the use of modern technological advancements. They can
also
 provide low-income farmers with proper land so that they can harvest more.
This
 way, both the economy of that country and the wealth of
people
 can improve.
Furthermore
, authorities should educate
people
 with the latest findings on more efficient methods of farming and encourage them to grow crops that are suitable for their soil and weather.
This
 can help them have more sustainable agriculture. In conclusion, hunger is still present in the current developed world. It is up to the governments to address
this
problem
,
otherwise
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 the lives of many individuals would be in great peril.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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