In order to study at University, students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them, so, some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do u agree / disagree?

It is argued by some that undergraduates needed to pay exorbitant school fees
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Although
, not all
college
students can meet the expense whereas others believe that tertiary
education
ought to
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made
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accessible for all at no
cost
. In my
opibion
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opinion
, I agree that formal
education
should be free.
Firstly
, it makes
education
fair for everyone.
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, everyone will be able to afford
college
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education
and can go to
school
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the school
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of their choice irrespective of their social class.
For instance
, in Sweden varsity
education
is
cost free
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for all citizens and foreigners in the country giving each member of the nation the opportunity to learn in any
college
of his choice.
Hence
bridging the gap between the poor and the rich.
Secondly
, there would be
more
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educated population.
This
means that if more people could afford
college
, many
individual
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would probably
attended
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.
As a result
increasig
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increasing
the literacy rate in the country and
increasing
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their
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economic power. Admittedly, it is true that
high
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cost
tuition fee
is require
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for financing.
This
is because there is
need
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to pay the staff and
administrayion
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administration
, as well ad the overhead
cost
to keep the campus running.
However
, not all freshmen can afford the charges. In conclusion,
low
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cost
varsity training is a must for any society that values equality and economic growth.
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