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In order to study at University, students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them, so, some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do u agree / disagree?

#study #university #students #tuition #fees #people #education
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It is argued by some that undergraduates needed to pay exorbitant school fees
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apply
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, not all
college
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 students can meet the expense whereas others believe that tertiary
education
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 ought to
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be made
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made
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 accessible for all at no
cost
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. In my
opibion
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opinion
, I agree that formal
education
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 should be free.
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, it makes
education
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 fair for everyone.
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, everyone will be able to afford
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college
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a college
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education
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 and can go to
school
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the school
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 of their choice irrespective of their social class.
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, in Sweden varsity
education
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 is
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cost free
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cost-free
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 for all citizens and foreigners in the country giving each member of the nation the opportunity to learn in any
college
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 of his choice.
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 bridging the gap between the poor and the rich.
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, there would be
more
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a more
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 educated population.
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 means that if more people could afford
college
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, many
individual
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individuals
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 would probably
attended
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attend
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.
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increasig
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increasing
 the literacy rate in the country and
increasing
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their
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its
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 economic power. Admittedly, it is true that
high
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high-cost
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cost
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 tuition fee
is require
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 for financing.
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 is because there is
need
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a need
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 to pay the staff and
administrayion
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administration
, as well ad the overhead
cost
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 to keep the campus running.
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, not all freshmen can afford the charges. In conclusion,
low
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low-cost
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cost
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 varsity training is a must for any society that values equality and economic growth.
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