In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose art subjects (e.g. literature), and boys tend to choose science subjects (e.g. physics). Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed? Do you agree or disagree?

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one of the factors

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opting for a college course

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girls select art subjects and on

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science subjects. I believe that

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should be altered in terms of choosing their courses. In the following paragraph, I provide detailed support

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. Traditionally, communities across the globe

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their duties based on the

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may be influencing the current generation to choose their education fields in the same way. To explain

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explore why I disagree

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customs and support changing

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number of men and women to bring

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possible only when students opt for courses

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of their

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, companies can design satisfactory products as they bring different perspectives to the table.

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they need to satisfy every client irrespective of their

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teams as they share their thoughts and specifications during the design phase.

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, to recapitulate, youth are considering

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their

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and women in all the sectors as the industries are looking for all the genders.

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1Word repetition
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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Gender stereotypes
Societal expectations
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Parental guidance
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Biological differences
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Gender-neutral education
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