In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose art subjects (e.g. literature), and boys tend to choose science subjects (e.g. physics). Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed? Do you agree or disagree?

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one of the factors
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opting for a college course
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girls select art subjects and on
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hand boys
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towards
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science subjects. I believe that
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should be altered in terms of choosing their courses. In the following paragraph, I provide detailed support
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. Traditionally, communities across the globe
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separate
their duties based on the
gender
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may be influencing the current generation to choose their education fields in the same way. To explain
further
, most boys follow their father and girls dream to be like their mother, since their parents
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as per
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gender
, kids follow the same.
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explore why I disagree
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customs and support changing
this
tendency.
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equal
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number of men and women to bring
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possible only when students opt for courses
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irrespective
of their
gender
.
As a result
, companies can design satisfactory products as they bring different perspectives to the table.
For example
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they need to satisfy every client irrespective of their
gender
which is possible only by
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diversified
verified
teams as they share their thoughts and specifications during the design phase.
Finally
, to recapitulate, youth are considering
thier
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their
gender
as a crucial parameter in terms of selecting their fields.
However
,
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men
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and women in all the sectors as the industries are looking for all the genders.
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  • Gender stereotypes
  • Societal expectations
  • Academic choices
  • Role models
  • Parental guidance
  • Practical
  • Lucrative
  • Biological differences
  • Inherent interests
  • Controversial
  • Equal opportunities
  • Educational experience
  • Career opportunities
  • Gender-neutral education
  • Dismantle
  • Stereotypes
  • Underrepresented
  • Irrespective
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