Some people think tgat children be taught to be competitive in school. Others, however, say that cooperation and team working skills are more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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it is sometimes thought that
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ought to be trained
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competition, other people believe that association and unity are more essential. In my opinion, I consider that
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and
group
dynamics are crucial and should be learnt in formal education. On the one hand, many individuals think that young
children
educated to work as a team are well prepared for future lives and, I agree.
In other words
, when self-assertiveness
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included in
school
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curriculum, it would
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younger ones for the competitive system in the real world.
For example
,
children
will be in competition with peers during
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application process as well as when searching
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in the labour market.
Hence
, there is
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to have knowledge
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contesting.
Furthermore
, it creates motivation.
This
is because younger ones are
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to work harder, making them more excited about learning.
As a result
, they are inspired
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education.
On the other hand
, it is often because
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essential social skills are built if
children
are taught association and synergy.
This
means when students work as a team they learn how to listen attentively to their leaders, in order to perform their individual roles.
For instance
, in order to achieve a set down goals in a
group
, each member must contribute effectively and follow instructions laid down by the coordinator.
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school
children
develop constructive speaking and conscious listening. Another reason is that it boosts
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self- confidence
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. In order words, students knowing that their voices will be heard and appreciated in the
group
will be more courageous and encourage
further
participation in
group
activities. For
this
reason, it improves their
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. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions. I think that
group
cohesion and partnership are more advantageous as it fosters interpersonal skills and self - assertiveness
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