Some people believe that students should be taught International news as a subject at schools. Others feel that this would be a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some individuals think that international
news
should be one of a subject
in schools, while others disagree and think that it would be a waste of time. From my point of view
, I agree with the former point of view
and think that learning about international news
can also
give many benefits to children
. In the following paragraphs
both of these viewpoints and my opinion will be discussed in detail before the conclusion is reached.
On the one hand, there are some people Add a comma
,paragraphs
think
that international Correct pronoun usage
who think
news
or the important event that occurs in the world is crucial and children
should learn that to know what has happened in
Change preposition
apply
these day
. Change the determiner
this day
these days
Although
,
some Remove the comma
apply
children
might do
not understand the whole story because some Unnecessary verb
apply
news
may involve with
Change preposition
apply
a
complicated and delicate issues, Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
children
should have known some idea of these
Change the determiner
this news
news
in order to get familiar with the issue that have occured
in real life. Correct your spelling
occurred
For instance
, the event of Russia's war with Ukraine that have
Change the verb form
has
happend
recently, Correct your spelling
happened
children
may have nothing to do with it but they should have learned and get
some Wrong verb form
gotten
idea
from Fix the agreement mistake
ideas
this
event, such
as we should not use violence to solve the problem. In my personally
opinion, I think it would be a great idea Change the adverb
personal
students
have learned international Change preposition
for students
news
and have this
knowledge in the school subject
.
On the other hand
, some people think that learning international news
would be a waste of time for students. They think Add an article
a student
the student
student
should Fix the agreement mistake
students
strict
with the main Add a missing verb
be strict
subject
and knowledge about maths, sciences, or physics because they can use those subjects in the future in order to build their career. Additionally
, their future are
mostly depend on the exam, if they have to waste their valuable school time Change the verb form
is
for
learn Change preposition
to
other
Change the wording
another subject
other subjects
subject
that do
not involve Change the verb form
does
with
the main Change preposition
apply
subject
, they may not get their dream scores on their exam at school.
In conclusion, there are different points of view
about we
should be taught international Correct word choice
whether we
news
as a subject
at schools or not. In my view
, I think it necessary and it would be many benefits to children
to learn and know about what have
happened in our world because one day Change the verb form
has
children
will grow up to become adults and live their lives in the would, so it would be better to be familliar
with Correct your spelling
familiar
those kind
of Change the determiner
that kind
those kinds
news
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