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Some people believe that students should be taught International news as a subject at schools. Others feel that this would be a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some individuals think that international
news
 should be one of a
subject
 in schools, while others disagree and think that it would be a waste of time. From my point of
view
, I agree with the former point of
view
 and think that learning about international
news
 can
also
 give many benefits to
children
. In the following
paragraphs
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 both of these viewpoints and my opinion will be discussed in detail before the conclusion is reached. On the one hand, there are some people
think
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who think
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 that international
news
 or the important event that occurs in the world is crucial and
children
 should learn that to know what has happened
in
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apply
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these day
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this day
these days
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.
Although
,
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 some
children
 might
do
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apply
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not understand the whole story because some
news
 may involve
with
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apply
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a
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complicated and delicate issues,
children
 should have known some idea of
these
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this news
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news
 in order to get familiar with the issue that have
occured
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occurred
 in real life.
For instance
, the event of Russia's war with Ukraine that
have
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has
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happend
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happened
 recently,
children
 may have nothing to do with it but they should have learned and
get
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gotten
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 some
idea
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ideas
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 from
this
 event,
such
 as we should not use violence to solve the problem. In my
personally
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personal
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 opinion, I think it would be a great idea
students
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for students
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 have learned international
news
 and have
this
 knowledge in the school
subject
.
On the other hand
, some people think that learning international
news
 would be a waste of time for students. They think
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a student
the student
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student
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students
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 should
strict
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be strict
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 with the main
subject
 and knowledge about maths, sciences, or physics because they can use those subjects in the future in order to build their career.
Additionally
, their future
are
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is
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 mostly depend on the exam, if they have to waste their valuable school time
for
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to
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 learn
other
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another subject
other subjects
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subject
 that
do
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does
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 not involve
with
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apply
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the main
subject
, they may not get their dream scores on their exam at school. In conclusion, there are different points of
view
 about
we
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whether we
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 should be taught international
news
 as a
subject
 at schools or not. In my
view
, I think it necessary and it would be many benefits to
children
 to learn and know about what
have
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has
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 happened in our world because one day
children
 will grow up to become adults and live their lives in the would, so it would be better to be
familliar
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familiar
 with
those kind
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that kind
those kinds
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 of
news
.
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