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The diagram depicts the way of
electricity
 production in a hydroelectric power station. Overall, it is clear that there are
day
 and night stages with the
day
 stages involving the
electricity
 production from storing river
water
 in a
reservoir
 to operating reversible turbines to generate
electricity
. At night, the
water
flows
 back
in to
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 the initial
reservoir
 and the river. Looking at the diagram more closely, one can see that the
first
 step is the
water
 which in
reservoir
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the reservoir
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is go
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goes
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 through the intake of
dam
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the dam
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 which only opened during the
day
 and
flows
 to the power station which is located
in
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lower
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the lower
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 level of the
reservoir
 to generate
electricity
. After the
water
flows
 into the reversible turbines and the resulting
electricity
is send
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 to
national
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the national
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 grid through power lines while the
water
flows
 to a low-level
reservoir
. During the night, the reversible turbines pump
water
 from the low-level
reservoir
 into
high-level
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a high-level
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reservoir
 for use the
next
day
.
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