Many animal species are becoming extinct as a result of human activities. What are the causes and possible solutions to this problem?

it is undeniable people do some things that influenced animal's life and we witness many of them will go toward dying out, surely
this
is an effect that creates by humans, and
this
essay will check some causes and I express some solutions for
this
topic.
Firstly
, people used energy very much and
this
led to a changing ecosystem as well as we can see earth has gone toward warming
also
there many companies that produce vehicle more and more
also
,
on the other hand
, we face with the increase of air pollution all of them wants to extinct a lot of species of
animals
,
for example
, human for their entertainment bring different
animals
to the city which is known as the zoo and we can see they can not take care of them and
animals
can not live in the prison and
this
is lead to they are suffering too many diseases and I think so governments should adopt a rule that does not allow people who want to catch
animals
and use of them for entertainment.
secondly
, there are many illegal hunters that want to hunt rare types of
animals
that
this
measure wants to hurt both same environment and
animals
,
for instance
, today we can see a wide range of
animals
become extinct,
furthermore
, I think so lawmakers should decide for
this
subject,
otherwise
,
this
can become to a disaster
that is
detrimental for humankind and
animals
. In conclusion, we can overcome
this
matter when we take a serious decision for
animals
and we decrease the reasons that want to lead environmental pollution
also
we should avoid hunting them whether for amusement or consuming of them and officials must interfere at
this
issue and find a magnificent solution for that,
thus
, we can hope for good future, especially for
animals
.
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