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Some people think that it is better for kids to learn with online educational materials, while others believe kids should learn with hard copy/printed educational materials. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #kids #materials #copy
Nowadays,most
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the institute provides online learning and research paper for kids and adults for courses. Most
the
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developed countries focus on technology learning and some are not. Depends on learners how he/she focus on their academic skills. Another side, some students still would prefer
learning
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 with
a hard copies
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.
This
 technology world generation learns from internet blogs, education
website
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 on google and etc.
Besides
, children can save lots of time learning what they
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be become
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 in future.
This
 method helps learners not need to bring
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hard copy books just take laptops or tablets.
In addition
, easy to search any keyword, highlight and take notes.
Although
, kids not
read
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 on the computer continues because of
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 on
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 and mentally stable. Some students prefer hard copy printed books to read and write.
Moreover
, they can highlight
toaccording
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according
to according
 their need and writing
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 best for those who do not prefer tying in computer.
Furthermore
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kid
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kids
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 do not
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 by health care not
addicted
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 to
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game
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 on a tablet due to
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a student
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student
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feeling
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 fast and convenient. One of the major
drawback
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,
they
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 will be carrying lots of books that they
want
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 be study. In summary, both technology and hard copy are good for children
,
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 and contribute to their success in their academic goals. Depends on kids what they choose for their
convenient
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 to study to
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successful
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 in life. We know computers are essential for today's world but still sometimes need to provide and make habit both conveniently.
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