You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery scholl. In your letter, Describe what you enjoyed about the course Say how muchcooking you've done since the source suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer

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Dear Mr Nolan; I hope you are doing fine and everything goes well with you. Based on your request, I would like to express my feeling and, feedback about your cookery class in the following paragraphs.

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of all, I would like to thank you. Thank you for

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great opportunity. I had the honour to be in your class and learn from you. I enjoyed every minute of your class. Especially, the time we had to taste our food. I remember it was the most fun and, scariest time of the whole

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. After graduation, everybody in our family calls me “Gordon Ramsy Junior”. I can say thanks to you, now my little daughter eats breakfast and sometimes she is even looking for more! I made plenty of dishes for my family and, friends. Nowadays, when they carve for different cuisine, they are not looking in Uber Eats, they simply call me!

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, I believe the school is missing one cookery

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and

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“bakery”. I personally will be the

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person who signs up for

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course

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. I know you have an experience with

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major,

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, please add

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to the school. In the end, I would like to thank you for everything. I followed you on Instagram, so I can learn more about your tricks. Yours Sincerely Mohammad Lesani

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

225 words

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