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Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He / She would like your advice about finding a place to live. write an email to your firned. In your email describe where you lived when you were a student at a university recommend the best way for him / her for accommodation warn him / her of mistakes make when choosing accommodation

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Dear John, I hope
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 email finds you well. Great to hear that you have received an offer from
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university
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. And, you will start your
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 life
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 September. Soon or later, you need to search for your accommodation. Because I lived in the Victoria area when I was a student at
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University
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. Victoria area is closed to
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university
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, which has a direct bus to the
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University
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 campus.
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, there is a variety of supermarkets, and fast-food chains, including Mcdonald's. So, you don't need to worry about how to get your quick dinners during the peak season. You better try to have a site check around June. As far as I know, the landlord will start to put their notice on a student notice board in July, because some graduated
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 will terminate their rental agreement around
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 period. Most landlords are willing to lease their houses to
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 at competitive prices. You can stay at my house for a while until you find your targeted house. I know that most
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 are concerned about price, and tend to choose the cheapest one. I do agree that pricing is one of the major concerns. I want to remind you that most of the cheapest accommodation do not have good local transportation supply, most of them are stopped providing services after 09:00PM. Because of the homework workload of
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university
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, I would like to warn you that you might need
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 as one of the considerations. I heard that many
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 regret taking the cheapest accommodation with local transportation at night.
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, they need to take a taxi home, which creates a certain financial burden for them. If you want to have more information about Victoria's zone, please let me know. Looking forward to having caught up with you soon! Yours faithfully, XXXXX
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