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*Question* Some people believe that to be successful in a sport, natural ability is necessary while others think hard work and practice is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#*question* #people #sport #ability #work #practice
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Some individuals think that we should pay more attention and
practice
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 sports activity or physical ability.
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, some
people
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 think that it is better for
people
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 to be encouraged in
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 and
practice
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. In the following paragraphs,
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 of these viewpoints will be discussed in detail. On the one hand, sports activities are beneficial for human health. Most sports or other natural abilities are one way of exercise, so
people
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 can get
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 healthy bodies and be able to have a good training at the same time.
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, running athletes can accomplish in their career and they
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 have good health and shape of the body.
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,
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 can do what they love as a job, they would enjoy doing that thing and the result will be appreciated.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 think hard
work
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 is very important and we should
practice
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 in order to gain more skills in
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.
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, if you were a teacher, you would plan your courses well and
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 your teaching skills every day.
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,
people
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 always want to get a promotion in their
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 in order to represent that they are successful in their career,
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people
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 should have responsibility for their
work
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, so
people
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 want to express that they are hard-working and dedicate to
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. In conclusion,
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 of these viewpoints have benefits and drawbacks, so
people
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 should decide for themself what activities are suitable for their life.
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,
people
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 should have a
work
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-life balance. In my opinion,
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 natural activity and
work
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 are
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 important and we should divide proper time between those two activities.
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