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Some people think there should be free health care for all people, but others disagree. Discuss both sides.

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Healthcare is an important issue nowadays.
Health
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 is, directly or indirectly, related to productivity. Without good
health
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, a man can’t burgeon in his or her life. That’s why it is reckoned the most precious wealth on the planet earth. So, a person’s productivity is tantamount to a country’s overall economic growth. That’s why governments of various
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 take lots of initiative to ameliorate the country’s
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care
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system
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 and put public
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 paramount. The
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 of all
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 is not the same. Many
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 subsidies the
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, others don’t.
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 trend, subsidization of the
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, is visible in most developed
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. But the 3rd world
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 are still left behind in
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 race, as they don’t have that many resources to spend money on developing
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. Their per capita income is
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 not sufficient which in the long run stems from the govt. spending. There are lots of schemes in
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 systems and maybe it is good for the economy in the long term as it increases productivity. But there are some discrepancies between the two groups regarding free
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 for all the
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. According to one group, it’s the best option for the country to make their
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 free and at the same time, it makes the
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 easily accessible and open to all the
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. No
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 have to face any kind of discrimination regarding
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. And overall, it begets a bonanza for the economy. But according to other groups, free healthcare has many disadvantages too. Free
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 to all would mean
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 belonging to any
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 get the same facility and the upper
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 who can buy medical facilities don’t facilities pay any penny for
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 purpose. So, the government should make a vivid policy based on
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. The policy gives the lower
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 the highest opportunity and the upper
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 gets the lowest. In
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 way, we can ensure equal opportunity for our
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 and brings phenomenal growth to the economy.
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