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Write about the following topic: Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

#topic #people #meat #fish #health #world
Many people consume only
vegetables
 and fruits in their
food
. It is important to have
meat
 and
fish
 for all
kind
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kinds
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 of
neutrients
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nutrients
 in
diet
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the diet
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. The
difficiency
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deficiency
 of vitamins may lead to health issues .
This
 essay will discuss
about
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importance
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the importance
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 of
meat
 and
fish
 in
food
 to maintain good health. The types of
neutrients
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nutrients
 available in
vegetables
 and fruits may not be sufficient
to
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for
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human
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the human
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 body to maintain stamina for
longer
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a longer
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 time. The vitamins required for good mental and physical health are easily
availble
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available
 from the sea foods. The consumption of non-veg
food
 could maintain
natural
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the natural
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eco-system
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ecosystem
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 in its best way. To grow
amount
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the amount
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 of
vegetables
 required may need huge land, fertilizer and pesticides which can be harmful to
environment
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the environment
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. While the
suffient
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sufficient
 quantities of
meat
 or
fish
is
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are
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 available naturally.
Moreover
, the human teeth
is
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are
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 designed to eat
meat
 and
fish
comfartably
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comfortably
comfortable
 which indicates
the
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that
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 these species are eatable. Some people have different spiritual theories that
not
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do not
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allowing
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allow
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 them to have
meat
 or
fish
 in their
diate
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diet
date
 plan.
The recent
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Recent
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 research says that around 32% of
global
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the global
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 population
are
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is
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 not consuming
meat
 or
fish
 as
food
. The government shall run social awareness program to avoid
mis-conceptions
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misconceptions
 regarding
the
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apply
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food
 habits. The
neutrients
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nutrients
 available in
meat
 and
fish
 are quite cheaper as
compare
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compared
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 to the other foods. The production of
vegetables
 and fruits may lead to severe pollution of
environment
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the environment
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, land, air and water. The consumption of
meat
 and
fish
 in
food
 would balance
environment
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the environment
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 and benefit of
universe
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the universe
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.
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