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Discuss the advantages and the disdavantages of study abroad

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Studying abroad is still a dream for most
students
 in developing countries and I am one of these people. In the following paragraph, I will explain my opinion on supporting the advantages and outweigh the disadvantages of studying abroad. On the one hand,
Students
 feel depressed to live in their own country. So, Studying abroad is an easy way to live overseas. There
are
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 a lot of scholarship support for expert
students
 in various countries in
Europe
 and North America.
Secondly
, It is the best way to learn a new language because society's atmosphere will pressure you to survive.
For example
, If you live in
medium-size
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 cities in Germany or France, The information from exchange
students
say
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 that they must practice speaking German or French. After that, They live more comfortable than in the past.
Thirdly
, It is the best way to travel to
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an attraction
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attraction
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place
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.
For example
, I fly from Thailand to
Europe
 estimated 10 hours.
However
, If
students
 stay in
Europe
 for two years
in
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 a master's degree. It has a time
gaining
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 your travel experiences. It has comfortable public transport throughout
Europe
such
 as train, bus and
airplane
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aeroplane
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.
It
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isIt
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 more standard than in my countries.
On the other hand
, I think I will miss my family because I am fish out of water when staying overseas. Sometimes
students
 may be
stress
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 from living alone in a different culture.
However
, I think everybody is not cruel to you. You can find new friends overseas. In conclusion, In my opinion, I discover advantages from study abroad more than disadvantages.
Moreover
, In my life, I wish I would go to study abroad.
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