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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Some argue that the major environmental issue of
this
 era is the distinct number of
plants
 and
animals
, while others argue that there are many other crucial ecological problems.
Although
biodiversity
 is important, global warming is a major environmental problem. On the one hand,
Biodiversity
 is required for the ecosystems to function because the
loss
 of
plants
 and
animals
 disturbs the food chain.
Animals
 eat
plants
, and when
animals
 die, it is decomposed by microorganisms and these decomposed
animals
 are used as fertilizers by
plants
.
This
 is to say that if there will be
loss
 of
plants
 and
animals
 on the planets, the food chain will be disturbed.
For example
, according to a survey of Times India, there is a danger of extinction of tiger that eats small animal species.
However
, I believe that global warming is a major threat to the
loss
 of
biodiversity
.
On the other hand
, global warming is an immediate threat to human life because of rising sea levels And extreme weather. Changes in temperature cause changes in rainfall that cause flooding and landslides, destroying homes and communities, and costing billions of pounds.
For instance
, because of frequent storms in the Maldives, there were 5000 people died in 2019.
Therefore
, I believe that global warming is a major problem for human beings. I'm conclusion,
although
 the
loss
 of
biodiversity
 am cause an imbalance between ecological systems, I think global warming is a critical problem because it is more dangerous for humans than the
loss
 of
biodiversity
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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